My dear, it was a great story, and StarScream is going to be very pissed about DeathStrike taking over the Seekers like that
However, there were major typos:
...on my mark I you to teleport ...
...the Decepticon heavy fighter ignored the Autobots to concentrate on the Autobots....
..."Groundhammer, Anvilbreaker, hit the Guardian with everything you've got!" Deathstrike ordered. "Form up for another pass," he ordered the other Seekers. "Keep hitting the Autobots. I'll finish the Guardian. Anvilbreaker, Groundhammer, shift fire to the Autobots."...
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Typo Patrol: Mostly because it's confusing who's acting.
They would be on the adventurers in moments. Streamers of pastel light stretched out from his hands to lash at the adventurers.
The elephant's magic tore down Nalifan's wall, exposing all of his comrades to its deadly magic
Otherwise... WOW... that was a fast, furious assault, but it still seems the Proto-God died a little too easily. Then again, 4 20+level characters with heavy enchantments and max skills will do that.
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Yeah.. that about covers it. Unless it's cockroaches, where there's one, there's twenty. With cockroaches, you've either got just the one.... or two hundred.
RE: Daleks ...
Nice, we get to see a little more of the Great Plan.
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"So," said Sylvetria, looking up at the stormclouds above Neridian, "are we still going to burn the city?" The adventurers had halted on the side of the road, several miles from the outskirts of the city. Mist streamed from the Vaasan's lips. "Because it looks like someone beat us to it. Figuratively."
BUWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Hope y'all are dressed warmly!
"it takes two sides to end a war but only one to start one. And those who do not have swords may still die upon them." Tolken
The elements don't bother Trizkel that much anymore, he learned from his first trip to the surface. The beginning of the campaign left him on the surface during a winter brought on by magic and it was not pleasant as he only had clothing suitable to living in the under dark. He has developed a power that allows him to handle hostile environments and of course he has a magic item for his lady that allows her to ignore extreme cold if needed.
"Forgivness is between them and God, its my job to arrange the meeting."
"I don't want you to kill him -- I just want you to bury him. If he dies in the process, that's his problem."
"Yessss," his Flamewind,
"I see your lossening up,"
So, StarJammer was an (accused) criminal? Makes one wonder how she 'protested' the Council's 'lies'. Always two sides of a story, with the truth in the center. Wonder why Megs protected her in the Ring? Either way, it got him a loyal ally.
Is the next chapter going to be 'Stryke's Rebellion, or will there be another chapter leading up to it?
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