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rhoenix wrote:Fucking Motormaster.
Assholes are fun to write.

CynCat, I hope your version of the Aerialbots is a bit more complementary than what they got in the TV G1 show, if you decide to put them in.
I've mentioned them twice. If they don't show up at some point then I've really screwed the pooch.
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Cynical Cat wrote:Assholes are fun to write.
Well, its not that - its his obsession with being "King of the Road," which is hilarious to me, considering that he'll never have the title. Even if all other possibilities for the crown are gone, the other Stunticons would jump his ass for lack of a better enemy.
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rhoenix wrote:
Well, its not that - its his obsession with being "King of the Road," which is hilarious to me, considering that he'll never have the title. Even if all other possibilities for the crown are gone, the other Stunticons would jump his ass for lack of a better enemy.
No they won't. They hate him, but they're afraid of him. Of course, they won't weep if Prime or Magnus or Overload beats him into stasis lock.
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Cynical Cat wrote:No they won't. They hate him, but they're afraid of him. Of course, they won't weep if Prime or Magnus or Overload beats him into stasis lock.
Huh, I thought their whole dynamic was always tenuous at best; I didn't know they were actually piss-scared of Motormaster.

But yeah, none of them would do more than kick one of his tires in reverence if Motormaster got aced by Magnus, Overload, or Optimus.
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rhoenix wrote:
Huh, I thought their whole dynamic was always tenuous at best; I didn't know they were actually piss-scared of Motormaster.
It is tenuous. He's their leader and they hate him. He rules by fear and he is a big, bad heavily armed 'bot. There are, however, four of them. It's not a stable situation and its likely to come to pieces in all sorts of circumstances when their fear of him decreases or their hate increases.
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Cynical Cat wrote:It is tenuous. He's their leader and they hate him. He rules by fear and he is a big, bad heavily armed 'bot. There are, however, four of them. It's not a stable situation and its likely to come to pieces in all sorts of circumstances when their fear of him decreases or their hate increases.
So that's what was meant by tenuous - that makes sense.

Autobot intelligence should find ways of making the Stunticons pick fights with each other, and record each incident for personal viewing enjoyment as well as project evidence.
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Tev: Cyncat's got a new TF up. *reads, comments on it to Nitram* Oh shit! Motormaster just smacked Overload!
Nit: Oh HEEELLLL No... It's on bitch.
I think the fight's about to start.
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LadyTevar wrote:I think the fight's about to start.
No. Now we're about to see a beating epic enough to make Motormaster momentarily lose grip with reality, think Overload is his dad, and curl into a ball crying.
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Oh... Cyncat? If you have Crimson using her grenades, she can do 3 without harming herself, other than drainage. The 4th is possible but it will leave her close to stasislock from low energon.
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rhoenix wrote: Autobot intelligence should find ways of making the Stunticons pick fights with each other, and record each incident for personal viewing enjoyment as well as project evidence.
Ultra Magnus beats Menasor in one of the Dreamwave comics by getting the component Stunticon personalities to squabble by taunting Motormaster and calling him a fuck up.
No. Now we're about to see a beating epic enough to make Motormaster momentarily lose grip with reality, think Overload is his dad, and curl into a ball crying.
Do you have any idea how powerful Motormaster is? He can't take Prime, but he is one bad motherfucker. Its going to take a lot for Overload to beat him after being sucker slammed like that. Aim lower. Surviving at all is going to be tough.

Of course, that just makes the fight more interesting. :grin:
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Cynical Cat wrote:Ultra Magnus beats Menasor in one of the Dreamwave comics by getting the component Stunticon personalities to squabble by taunting Motormaster and calling him a fuck up.
You know, I never really thought much of Ultra Magnus before now. Now, however, my respect for him went up several notches.
Cynical Cat wrote:Do you have any idea how powerful Motormaster is? He can't take Prime, but he is one bad motherfucker. Its going to take a lot for Overload to beat him after being sucker slammed like that. Aim lower. Surviving at all is going to be tough.
Well, that's why Shellshock's there, I'm hoping. He's a bot who'll happily shoot an enemy in the back, just so they can be done and over with faster.
Cynical Cat wrote:Of course, that just makes the fight more interesting. :grin:
Of course! And who says one has to do the expected thing?
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rhoenix wrote:
You know, I never really thought much of Ultra Magnus before now. Now, however, my respect for him went up several notches.
He's pretty much a bitch in the movie. Its was not a good way to introduce the character.
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How does a bot Shellshock's size sneak up on an overseer you ask? Vorns of practice.

Oh, and I can definately guess what's coming next... and it's going to be epic.
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Charon wrote:How does a bot Shellshock's size sneak up on an overseer you ask? Vorns of practice.

Well, he had a little distraction in the form of Stryke and was producing five thunderstorms worth of noise from his own weapons fire. That helped.
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YAY!!! Another Chapter, just in time for my afternoon break. :grin: Elita-1, Crimson's grenades, Shellshock hitting Menasor in the face, and Overload's still bitching about his stolen rifle. :lol:
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The Decepticon warrior charged shouting "die Autobots!"
I know Motormouth's an idjit, but can't he use proper capitolization?
Stryke raised his laser pistol above the cover and fired blindly Wildrider.
WOW! Stryke got an Upgrade! He can fire a whole Decepticon from his Blaster!
Menasor rose to his feet and leapt high into the air, rising high above the battlefield and not making himself an easy target ... "Stunticons!" her roared. "Form Menasor!"
Two here... first, how can Menasor be rising to yell, and when was the sex-change?
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LadyTevar wrote:
The Decepticon warrior charged shouting "die Autobots!"
I know Motormouth's an idjit, but can't he use proper capitolization?
That is correct grammar.

Two here... first, how can Menasor be rising to yell, and when was the sex-change?
He can fly, that's how he can rise.
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Good ol' Alpha Trion. If any Autobot can go "lol Decepticon technology," it's him.
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rhoenix wrote:Good ol' Alpha Trion. If any Autobot can go "lol Decepticon technology," its him.
Well, it took him some time, some samples, and some experimentation but yeah he made the thrall modules his bitches.
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Cynical Cat wrote:Well, it took him some time, some samples, and some experimentation but yeah he made the thrall modules his bitches.
Hey man, nobody said pimpin' is easy.
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YES! The Dinobots are also there!
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Typo:
Several minutes later two mails wearing adamanitine mail emerged ahead of Dread Queen Shaharith.
You keep mixing that one. Male/Mail.

Otherwise... ooooooooo... such a NICE chapter. I can't wait for more!
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LadyTevar wrote: You keep mixing that one. Male/Mail.
That'll happen when you change the the sentence. It was originally going to be "mail wearing consorts" :lol:
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LadyTevar wrote: You keep mixing that one. Male/Mail.
That'll happen when you change the the sentence. It was originally going to be "mail wearing consorts" :lol:
That does explain it :lol: It flows better the way you posted it, once the typo's fixed.
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TF: That fight Rocked.
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frigidmagi wrote:TF: That fight Rocked.
Seriously rocked.
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