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That was much silliness. Please continue
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Cute.
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The start of the second book is up.

The language and terminology might (well, does) get a little bit weird, so ask if there's anything you need to be cleared up.
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And the Slob's blood dideth spill upon the rug, and he nameth the place Muhthor'phukur, and it is a holy shrine to this day.
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*DIES LAUGHING*

And yes, I did attempt to read the names each time.

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I rejoiced when I learned they had used their wealth to standardize their names. What are they now?
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Trotoise, about the only thing I see wrong is where you name the lover Aidan, and then call him Artemis.

It's an interesting story so far, tho.
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I renamed him, seems I missed an instance of it. I went over it 4 times... grrrr Editing
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Comrade Tortoise wrote:I renamed him, seems I missed an instance of it. I went over it 4 times... grrrr Editing
A guy named Artemis?
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I didnt realize until part way through that it was the name of a greek godess OK! :oops:
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I will note that the world this story takes place in is a joint venture between myself and FM, and a work in progress. He has done a LOT of work, and I wouldn't want to diminish his contributions. Not mentioning it before was an oversight on my part.
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I'm really starting to like your "Price of Power" series, CT.
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Your character's attitude towards Earth independence, while understandable is rather saddening from my point of view.
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frigidmagi wrote:Your character's attitude towards Earth independence, while understandable is rather saddening from my point of view.
Short answer: she's a bit of a brat.

Long answer: there's a whole "lost generation" of children born immediately after the Talorans took over. Their parents lived under the UTHP regime, which was a brown(fascist)-green(econut) alliance and they don't have good memories of it, so they were raised to hate the only human regime in living memory. Typical teenage rebellion against the establishment is more or less the final key. There are actually a lot of kids who go around with flamboyantly dyed hair and contacts who learn Taloran, dress like Talorans, and so on, but the important thing is that very few of them live in rural Mississippi. She has even more to rebel against.

From some sense it is sad, but Tandi has always been a subject of Intalasha III since she was born after the conquest and does not know anything else. Patriotism now means loyalty to the empress.

I have a future chapter prepared with a flashback to her earlier school days. I just need to finish the next one first before I can post it.
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It actually makes a lot of sense to me.
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I was wondering if you were gonna get back to it CT.
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I'd have waited for morning again........... :oops:
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*falls over laughing*

And yes, there are some parents who would react that way to 'their little girl' becoming a superhero. :lol: :lol:
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More Amy! We want more! :cool:
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Whyfore did Gunpowder not work?!

Stupid sword&sorcery... means the Armor won't work either.
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I'll be getting into that in the next chapter. Steve and I have already talked about it and we have the general idea down. Just a few details to work out in the actual writing.
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Stupid Question: Can psi Ratings grow? Because a Rating 12 at his level is ... wow.
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*claps!* Yay, and yes pikes are a good solution, also crossbows can be made without springs per-say, using gears (look I don't fucking care how the laws of physics work a gear or a fucking black and tackle can't be made to not work) or a pulley system you can make a massively powerful draw, although reload time will suck ass.
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You don't need springs for crossbows.

You simply need a metal with appropriate tension, string wound from gut or tendon (it's a bit stronger), a wooden stock, with a hollow for a simple gear, and a trigger.

The gear is so simple, it's nothing but a rounded block of wood with two notches carved out of it, on an axle that lets it freely rotate. The bottom notch needs to be the right size for your trigger to catch and hold, and enough to keep the top notch from moving when the trigger is engaged. The top notch is what holds the string locked when cocked, and where you lay your quarrel.

Then it's as simple as aiming the bow and pulling the trigger. The bottom notch is freed, the tension of the string released, and the metal bar snaps forward, sending the quarrel down-range.

I can probably find SCA blueprints for one, as we use them for Combat Archery all the time. Some good gentles have made them for normal archery as well.
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