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#1226 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Ahh.... Paladins. If this works, I'll be surprised.
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#1227 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Fight! Fight! Fight!
By the way I love these lines.
You dare question our honor!?!
I'm not the one with the blood of peasant farmers on his hands.
Win!
You know usually I'm all about the vampire killing especially after Twilight (shakes fist at Myers) but well I gotta ask... What the fuck exactly are a bunch of peasant farmers suppose to do about a noble vampire? It's superhumanly strong and fast, smarter then they are, better equipped and has class levels that matter. Oh, lets add in the troops, magic items, fortress, friends it can call on for help... Getting out a pair of words before they get gutted would be an accomplishment!
Seriously the Sun worshipers there aren't really being that realistic. They want to break the yoke of the dead upon the living? That's cool, I can roll with that. But butchering peasants won't do it and there's not much the peasants can do in this situation. If they were really badasses and righteous they would be shanking undead the effective way. We sneak in during daylight and roast the motherfucker.
By the way I love these lines.
You dare question our honor!?!
I'm not the one with the blood of peasant farmers on his hands.
Win!
You know usually I'm all about the vampire killing especially after Twilight (shakes fist at Myers) but well I gotta ask... What the fuck exactly are a bunch of peasant farmers suppose to do about a noble vampire? It's superhumanly strong and fast, smarter then they are, better equipped and has class levels that matter. Oh, lets add in the troops, magic items, fortress, friends it can call on for help... Getting out a pair of words before they get gutted would be an accomplishment!
Seriously the Sun worshipers there aren't really being that realistic. They want to break the yoke of the dead upon the living? That's cool, I can roll with that. But butchering peasants won't do it and there's not much the peasants can do in this situation. If they were really badasses and righteous they would be shanking undead the effective way. We sneak in during daylight and roast the motherfucker.
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#1228 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
I fully agree, Frigid, but some people blame the victim.
BTW: WTF is Sharia? Elemental? Genasi?
Jezaine looks like she learned ShadowHand Martial Arts from Book of 9 Swords. It's great to see that being used in fiction, and you wrote it beautifully.
BTW: WTF is Sharia? Elemental? Genasi?
Jezaine looks like she learned ShadowHand Martial Arts from Book of 9 Swords. It's great to see that being used in fiction, and you wrote it beautifully.
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They aren't victims.LadyTevar wrote:I fully agree, Frigid, but some people blame the victim.
Vanilla human peasant sorceress with an affinity for storm magic.BTW: WTF is Sharia? Elemental? Genasi?
Actually I came up with it myself. She's basically a mid level fighter type with the coolness cranked up and a plausible reason for her being able to hang with lightning throwing sorceress and a skilled warrior blessed with divine might.Jezaine looks like she learned ShadowHand Martial Arts from Book of 9 Swords. It's great to see that being used in fiction, and you wrote it beautifully.
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#1230 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Your Free Federation stuff is quite excellent. I went back and re-read Rebirth; I really hope you keep churning out stories in that verse.
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#1231 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Another wonderful chapter, Cyncat :)
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So, you're writing for the Eldar now?
Very interesting start, I can't wait to find out more about this Eldar and why he left the Incubi.
Very interesting start, I can't wait to find out more about this Eldar and why he left the Incubi.
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From Eldar to Rogue Traders? Where are you leading us, Cyncat :)
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Enjoying the Dark Eldar so far, but I have to ask what are the Laws of Vect?
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Vect is the closest thing the Dark Eldar have to a ruler and his power is absolute within his reach and his reach is long. His rules are essentially a series of "do not do this thing because it's dangerous to society and I will kill you in terrible ways if I catch you doing it." Things like Chaos Worship or using psychic powers (because they could attract the attention of Slaanesh) or fucking with the Slave Suns or calling you kabal a noble house (because Vect usurped power from the noble houses back in the day and doing so is essentially saying "fuck you" to Vect).frigidmagi wrote:Enjoying the Dark Eldar so far, but I have to ask what are the Laws of Vect?
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#1236 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Reading Tattered Legion, interesting so far, as to characters... Heretic, heretic, super-heretic...
Alpharius.
Wait.
What?
Like, Alpharius, son of the Emperor Man, Alpharius?
I do like the line about transhuman supermen blundering to their dooms.
Alpharius.
Wait.
What?
Like, Alpharius, son of the Emperor Man, Alpharius?
I do like the line about transhuman supermen blundering to their dooms.
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So we got us a hunt in deeeeepppp spppppaaaacceeee?
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I love this line.. "Killing genestealers in hand to hand combat covers a warrior in glory, but you need only do it once to be filled with the desire to find an easier way of killing them
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#1239 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
The Earthdawn story gets interesting. I await updates eagerly.
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Now I'm trying to recall what I knew of EarthDawn. Since it's been ~15yrs, that might take a while.
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#1241 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
I remember when EarthDawn was the latest new game and I pondered if I could afford to buy in!LadyTevar wrote:Now I'm trying to recall what I knew of EarthDawn. Since it's been ~15yrs, that might take a while.
(I couldn't.)
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#1242 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Oh... Fuck. This? This is a pucker moment right here.
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I liked the fight and the byplay between the married couple is good. And damn it I was thinking of the floating disk thing, now I'll have to come up with something different.
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A blood elf? Man, not to many of those outside the damn woods, nor are they welcome in most parts. I'm a bit skeptical that bit about the bed skills. Maybe I'm being boringly conventional here but being stabbed by inch long thorns while doing the deed doesn't appeal to me.
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Earthdawn was the first place I saw S&M in fantasy RPG books. That and a truly fucked up marriage between two main characters. And it's okay frigid. No one's judging you and saying your too vanilla. Well maybe rhoenix is, but he romanced Jack in Mass Effect 2 so what can you say about his standards?frigidmagi wrote:A blood elf? Man, not to many of those outside the damn woods, nor are they welcome in most parts. I'm a bit skeptical that bit about the bed skills. Maybe I'm being boringly conventional here but being stabbed by inch long thorns while doing the deed doesn't appeal to me.
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It's a wonder he ain't dead yet. They must be force feeding him healing potions 3 times a day. It's gonna take some pretty solid mojo to bring him back into the fight.
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#1247 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
The formality was a good touch. You usually see that when two unknown groups of killers meet for the first time.
It seems odd that boneharvesters attackers were so competent that they stripped him of any gear but left him to die at something else's hand. Now I'll grant 99 times out of a 100 a horror will do the job, but hey looks like we just hit number 100 didn't we?
It seems odd that boneharvesters attackers were so competent that they stripped him of any gear but left him to die at something else's hand. Now I'll grant 99 times out of a 100 a horror will do the job, but hey looks like we just hit number 100 didn't we?
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Depends on how important it is that he suffer for a long, long time.frigidmagi wrote:The formality was a good touch. You usually see that when two unknown groups of killers meet for the first time.
It seems odd that boneharvesters attackers were so competent that they stripped him of any gear but left him to die at something else's hand. Now I'll grant 99 times out of a 100 a horror will do the job, but hey looks like we just hit number 100 didn't we?
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#1249 Re: Feedback for Cynical Cat
Suffering is overrated, surety is better.
Seriously if you really want someone to suffer, beat them with a hammer and throw them into quicksand and watch them sink to a horrible death. Granted it's not as lingering or as mind numbingly evil as throwing them to a horror, but you shouldn't suffer a horror to live anyways.
Still I'm not claiming this was incompetence. Like I said before 99 out of 100 times, the horror would have done the job. But this does confirm my prejudices in the matter. No one is dead until you actually see them die.
Seriously if you really want someone to suffer, beat them with a hammer and throw them into quicksand and watch them sink to a horrible death. Granted it's not as lingering or as mind numbingly evil as throwing them to a horror, but you shouldn't suffer a horror to live anyways.
Still I'm not claiming this was incompetence. Like I said before 99 out of 100 times, the horror would have done the job. But this does confirm my prejudices in the matter. No one is dead until you actually see them die.
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None of the adepts are disagreeing with you. This is also why you don't outsource your murdering to aristos. They try and get fancy, especially if they feel they have a personal stake in it.
It's not that I'm unforgiving, it's that most of the people who wrong me are unrepentant assholes.