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There's a lot of swords and ships and only so much false latin.
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Now why would an Astartes Chapter want *rid* of their Librarians?
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There's alot of anti-Psionic feeling in the Imperialium and with good reason. Psykers are the ones who tend to end up summoning deamons or more commonly setting people on fire or driving them insane or half a hundred other things. Add in that Psykers are the ones most at risk for deamon possession and your average Marine is an 8ft tall, superhuman killing machine... Outside of his uberarmor. Now imagine a possessed Space Marine with Psyker powers.

So odds are good a Astartes would have been rised in an anti-Psyker environment before being recruited and it is possible that Astartes within the chapter have had experiences with fallen libertarians.

Librarians also tend to be kept apart from other Astartes, their job is to record and maintain the knowledge of the chapter as well as being Psyker shock troops.

So these are guys who are separate from their marine brothers, have strange unexplainable powers and if they are weak will snap kill a bunch of Astartes and become host for a monster from the warp. Yeah I can see a little debate over keeping them.

It doesn't help that the Librarians are the result of a compromise where Psionics were allowed and sorcery outlawed. A compromised suggested by Magnus, the Primarch of the fallen Thousand Sons Marine Legion...
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Not setting the Librarians apart is going to be a big change. ALso, I hope Ludvia goes with them.
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oh crap.... Demon summoning by accident. He's lucky she had other uses for them
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It's good to see you writing again CC.
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The Cleric wrote:It's good to see you writing again CC.
Thank you.
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Ok.... WTF? Why do they need a WarBoss?
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the slave shoulders in dark red soft suits.
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I absolutely love your Free Federation stuff, and hope you keep writing it.
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Damn. He survived
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Jolan's farewell to Ristani sounded very ... final.

There is a lot more under the surface here, and I am waiting impatiently for you to reveal more.
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My other favorite story returns. Hoping that bug gets back into you for a while too :D!

If I see typos/grammar stuff, can I PM you or something? I know Tev does it, but I usually check it at night when most reasonable EST people are sleeping.
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The Cleric wrote: If I see typos/grammar stuff, can I PM you or something? I know Tev does it, but I usually check it at night when most reasonable EST people are sleeping.
Post it in this thread, PM me, or whatever works for you. I'm not that picky.
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Ohhhh off the books ops, so much fun. How do I just know that Black Heart will get pulled into this sooner or later?
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Brilliant as always my friend, brings me much entertainment to read stories.
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Where did all that come from?!
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Well... I hope Anders is still in the city, looks like you need a lot of healing.
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Well, that went well! Man, I hope that shit for brain guard isn't beating on Danny boy for the same reason that the Inquisitor is torturing Hotfoot. That would be awkward. :lol:
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I liked this chapter, it was an interesting look at the inside of the main characters head.
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I wondered what comuppence the braggart would receive. I was hoping more for GlassWalker assassins, but that works to.
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LadyTevar wrote: I was hoping more for GlassWalker assassins, but that works to.
One does not simply walk into Mordor and before you can even think about going there you have to know it exists. The "office building" is just as much a mage Chantry as a Iteration X tech lab or Celestial Chorus monastery. No pair of Garou assassins would have made it his office, and if they had and had stopped to talk they would have ended up being vivesected by the Progenitors.

Werewolves don't know about the Technocracy, let alone its most secretive member. Glasswalkers are slightly better off than other shapeshifters when it comes to the Syndicate, because they have the conceptual tools that will allow them to believe in mages focused on money exist.
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ask and you shall recieve. Awesome man. I was hoping that Edwin would get knifed but I guess sometimes you gotta be subtle. Speaking of subtle if your chapter master doesn't hit the orks soon they're gonna think he's shy or something. I don't think I wanna see orks trying to "help" a shy space marine.
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Even in the grim darkness of the future, the greatest enemy of Marines is the from air...

At least it ain't own bloody aircraft for once. Bless the Emperor for his small mercies.
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